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Lament

by on March 8, 2013

This weekend’s Trifextra challenge was to write thirty-three words, one of which used the word “stone”. They also wanted something serious. To be honest, I’m not sure I’m good with serious; I’m better with zombie penguins and Captain Happily Married. But I thought I would try this. It’s based on Henry Purcell’s opera, “Dido and Aeneas”, specifically “Dido’s Lament” in the third act. I heard it in a music class in undergrad, and thought then that it was unbearably tragic. I hoped I conveyed a little of that.

She clutched the sword tight, fire rising around her. He had pledged on that sword never to leave. But the gods’ word was stone. They had neglected to remind him about the sword.

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23 Comments
  1. Oops 🙂 It seems like a good time to make a hasty retreat.

  2. Excellent, I wish I was voting this week.
    Katie atBankerchick Scratchings

    • Thanks for dropping by; I’m glad you liked the story. I rather wish it was a voting week too. 🙂

  3. Kir Piccini permalink

    I felt the lament…felt the warmth from the fire around her and in her belly.
    WOW!

  4. This is just lovely – I think you do serious well. And Dido’s Lament is one of my very favorite pieces (we performed D&A in college…). Even now the song can bring tears to my eyes.

    • Thanks for your comment; Dido’s Lament is one of my favorite pieces as well. I don’t listen to overmuch opera, but I love that one.

  5. You do so much with so little!

  6. Scriptor Obscura permalink

    Sword of Damocles? 😛 Nice imagery, sort of reminded me of the Gollum’s caves in…Lord of the Rings, was it? This has a very dark fantasy-ish feel to it.

    • Nasty Trojan warriorses..:)

      I do so love dark fantasy. LOTR’s the best, but Lloyd Alexander’s Prydain Chronicles are right up there.

  7. I am not sure why but, I have always loved the sound of the word, Lament. I, also, love Opera’s ability to convey tragedy. Thanks for combining these two elements in your one seriously good story. Very well done.

    • I’ve always liked “lament” too. That and “marina”, “wafting”, and “spleen”.

  8. Lance permalink

    Great job with the fantasy element and making it so tight in 33 words. enjoyed this.

    • Thanks; to be honest, I hadn’t quite thought of the element of fantasy when I wrote it; I was going straight Greek tragedy. Now that you mention it, though…

  9. Dido always seemed to me to be a little hard done by. Divine mission or not Aeneas was a bit of a dick!

  10. Words as stones…so cool (:

    • I was going to go literal, have her standing on a rock or something, but then I thought the metaphor would work better. Apparently it did. 🙂

  11. Excellent teaser! Dark and full of mysetery!

    • I may just follow it up. I never liked the way that story ended…Dido needs vengeance, y’ know? 😛

  12. I’d go for a new ending to the story!

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