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by on May 10, 2013

This story was written for Trifecta’s weekend prompt, which was to write 33 words containing onomatopoeia. Which is a terribly fun word to say. Like spleen. And marina. And wafting. Anyway. This is also a continuation of the Volcano Rain series. Roll film!

“I’m…” William said tremulously, “with Rain.”

“Oh? Pity. Incidentally, Lunar Fleet Admiral Charles wants a word.”

A sudden blast scythed away their remaining wing. Alarms wirped hysterically inside the shuttlecraft.

Crap,” William repeated.


From → 1. Volcano Rain

  1. Oh, William…. Poor bastard just can’t catch a break, can he? 😉

  2. Lance permalink

    You had me a scythed. Great word choices. This was well crafted.

  3. space travel can be challenging.

  4. Nice word choices 🙂 wirp is a great word, which is unfortunately not recognized by my ‘smart’ phone. I wouldn’t worry, though. It had a field day with onomatopoeia. Hence the ironic quote marks surrounding the ‘smart’ bit.

    • It may not be recognized by the English language; I think I made it up as the sound I imagined a laser rifle would make. 😀

  5. I could totally visualize “a sudden blast scythed”. Love that word! Very nicely written.

  6. Draug419 permalink

    Wirp is such a pathetic little sound. I think the ship knows it’s done for (: Every piece of this story is so great.

    • The ship’s done for, definitely. Hopefully Rain and William aren’t so much…

  7. I love this…and he still ended up with “crap”. Maybe he should’ve kept his mouth shut? I’m pulling for Rain to save the day!

    • I’m sure she will! I have a few ideas, but we’ll see how it transpires….a lot of it depends on what prompt the Trifecta’s give. Let’s hope it’s not “surrender”.

  8. You really nailed this challenge Michael. Now I want an alarm that wirps! 😀

  9. Poor William. Great continuation.

  10. William’s about to have his pair snipped (onomatopoeia-style) about the same time he’s gotten them. (I mean the wings, of course.)

    • Snip is never a really good sound you want to hear. Like Draug’s use of “squish”. I can think of so many unpleasant contexts. 😛

  11. Surely the propulsion from the engines is enough to get them there in time? I certainly hope so. This is too good to end now.

    Thanks for linking up!

  12. scythed and wirped are fantastic. So is stoically persevering William!

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